New Website! let me know what you think

Get someone to proof read it for you. You have some serious spelling and grammar errors going on. Someone may hesitate to have you work on their 100k car if they feel you can't spell or write a proper sentence. I don't mean to be rude, but it's the truth.



The rest of the site looks good...maybe a little too busy, but informative.
 
looks cool. suggestion: use more puncuation and make some of the paragraphs shorter. maybe bullet points that get the point across and are more direct.
 
one thing I noticed is that you designed the site from what you think it should be. As a consumer I truthfully do not want to look threw a 118 pictures of a ferrari. Plus it was weird I moved my mouse and went threw like 50 pictues in two seconds. Remember keep it real simple, direct and to the point. Looks good but keep playing a little.
 
Do u realy get 800 dollars for buffing I am frome tennessee and I know the price can be different. I am not trying to be rude just sounds realy high
 
In addition to echoing everyone's suggestion of reviewing your spelling and grammar, here's a few things I would look at:



- In your "About Me" section, you state how old you were when you started detailing, and what year it was. With these 2 pieces of information, anyone can figure out how old you are. Whether you're a professional or not, some folks will have problems giving a 20 year old their $100,000 or even $40,000 vehicle. I'd remove the year you started.



- Make the images in your "Products" section clickable, and link them to the corresponding manufacture web sites.



- In your "Polishing" section, the final paragraph has text over text and I can't read it. This could be unique to my IE version 8, but something to look into, since I (as a potential customer) can't read it.



- The mouse-movement-scrolling picture gallery has to go. First, there's no instructions on how it works. I only figured it out by attempting to click on the image, then moving my mouse and realizing that the image changes based on my mouse movements. Too complicated for potential customers who may not be very technically inclined.
 
I think its on its way to being a very nice site besides the spelling errors on the first page you have Miami's Premier Detailing Team, but then you just have an about me section. No mention of other people, unless I missed it? Maybe change it to Miami's Premier Detailer?
 
A note about search engine optimization.



The title (what appears at the very upper left of your browser) of your home page should be your most desired keyword.



For example: "Mobile car detailing in Miami by Scheer Speed."



You should also list all the various suburbs that you service at the bottom of your home page. This will capture searches for terms like "[suburb] car detailing."



"Stuffing" (don't be obnoxious about it--use a light, small font) probably QUADRUPLES the traffic to this website:

Atomic Mobile Detailing | Detailing at Home, Work, or Anywhere Else!



See how many cities he gets hits from?



What good is a webpage if it doesn't get traffic?
 
Looks good. You need to sell yourself though. Tell people why they need to choose you. You do a pretty good job of that but you need to mentioned if you're insured as well because that definitely makes people feel comfortable. I would definitely be a little wary about putting out there that you are only 19-20 years old, it tends to make people wary about handing over their 2nd largest purchase (next to a home). Also, from a viewers perspective, the grey border around everything isn't uniform and it takes away from the clean feel of the site. I would definitely go with a single color background and stay away from trying to frame things. Just some constructive criticism.
 
Labster said:
Looks good. You need to sell yourself though. Tell people why they need to choose you. You do a pretty good job of that but you need to mentioned if you're insured as well because that definitely makes people feel comfortable. I would definitely be a little wary about putting out there that you are only 19-20 years old, it tends to make people wary about handing over their 2nd largest purchase (next to a home). Also, from a viewers perspective, the grey border around everything isn't uniform and it takes away from the clean feel of the site. I would definitely go with a single color background and stay away from trying to frame things. Just some constructive criticism.
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This is what I came her to post. I found the gray borders quite annoying especially on the 'Products' page.



Looks like it's heading in the right direction, but still needs work.

It's heads and shoulders above this one I just stumbled upon today! (Apologies if it's a member, but the site is terrible)
 
I like your website, looks clean and tidy. It also helps that you have some nice vehicles that you've detailed on there. Good work.
 
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