Critique My Business Card

Which Color Do You Like Best?

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dheath

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First off, I'm not at a fixed location - so no address. Also, I am kinda doing this part time, but I have been thinking about running off a few business cards to see if I can drum up a bit more business.



Critiques and Comments welcome... Thanks.



EDIT: forgot to mention, I'm in Southern California and we have mandatory water restrictions - so Eco Friendly refers to ONR :2thumbs:



EDIT 2: Printed up a quick copy on regular printer paper and the font was a bit too small to read, so I increased the sizes and messed with the spacing - image updated...



Update! added poll



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I would get rid of the "sealant" bullet. I don't think the general public knows the difference between wax & sealant anyway. I would replace that bullet with something about your mobility. Say something like "service at your home or office", or something like that.



Also, i don't understand the significance of the design in the background in the top left. What is that? Maybe you could change it to a raindrop, or soap bubbles, or something more pertinent to car detailing.



I think I might change the color scheme, but I'm not sure. I would have to see it in blue, or red before I could decide.
 
Yeah, and "DA Polishing" is probably not something most would be able to explain.



Andy
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I would get rid of the "sealant" bullet. I don't think the general public knows the difference between wax & sealant anyway. I would replace that bullet with something about your mobility. Say something like "service at your home or office", or something like that.



Also, i don't understand the significance of the design in the background in the top left. What is that? Maybe you could change it to a raindrop, or soap bubbles, or something more pertinent to car detailing.



I think I might change the color scheme, but I'm not sure. I would have to see it in blue, or red before I could decide.
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I would get rid of "D/A Polishing" and put an actual picture of a car on the card. Other than that I thing the colors and layout is perfect. Simple and neat.
 
I wouldn't put actual photo of the car, vector graphics work better for business cards. The only thing I notice is maybe the black feels too strong on the Golf GTI?
 
Here is what I would add....



Delete the "sealant" since wash and wax covers it

Add items like express detail, headlamp restoration, paint chip repair service

Give your title a more unique name such as Heath Auto Salon
 
Less said:
I would get rid of the "sealant" bullet. I don't think the general public knows the difference between wax & sealant anyway. I would replace that bullet with something about your mobility. Say something like "service at your home or office", or something like that.



Also, i don't understand the significance of the design in the background in the top left. What is that? Maybe you could change it to a raindrop, or soap bubbles, or something more pertinent to car detailing.



I think I might change the color scheme, but I'm not sure. I would have to see it in blue, or red before I could decide.
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Thanks for the input, I think I will take out sealant and put something about mobility. Great Idea!



The design in the background isn't really anything but a shape, honestly. The card felt kind of bare without something in the background. Maybe I will try to change it to something more detail related.



I will also mess around with the color scheme, maybe I'll post a couple versions in red/blue/green/ or whatever.



Got More Wax said:
Yeah, and "DA Polishing" is probably not something most would be able to explain.



Andy
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Good point, It's probably coming out. Thanks.



Jakerooni said:
Very concise and to the point. Excellent card at the glance.
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Thanks a lot Jakerooni :thx



Viking850 said:
I would get rid of "D/A Polishing" and put an actual picture of a car on the card. Other than that I thing the colors and layout is perfect. Simple and neat.
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D/A polishing is leaving, but I agree with Domas in that I actually like the vector graphic for a simple business card. I can always show pictures on a website or something. Thanks for the comments!



Domas said:
I wouldn't put actual photo of the car, vector graphics work better for business cards. The only thing I notice is maybe the black feels too strong on the Golf GTI?
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We're on the same page. I kinda like the black though. As we all know, the trick to making a white car look spectacular is how deep and dark you can get the blacks looking.



AGAuto said:
I think it looks great...simple and informative
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Thanks a lot, thats what i was shooting for!



Xtreme-Klean said:
Here is what I would add....



Delete the "sealant" since wash and wax covers it

Add items like express detail, headlamp restoration, paint chip repair service

Give your title a more unique name such as Heath Auto Salon
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Perfect, headlamp restoration! That is DEFINITELY going in. Not too comfortable with paint chip repair service yet though. Also, I don't really have a unique name and honestly don't plan on getting HUGE with detailing so I don't think necessarily having a business name is top priority? I mean I don't think people will be spreading the business name around as much as "I know this guy who does great detailing, here let me get his card." I am however the new guy with this detailing for profit, maybe I'm wrong. Thanks for the ideas though!



Thanks Everyone for the comments, I didn't think I would get so many so quickly. Comments from you guys means a lot and I appreciate it.
 
jeteast99 said:
Its simple and to the point. Also looks very professional.
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Thanks man, I appreciate it.



2TONLT1 said:
very nice and simple,what program did you use to create the card?
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Thanks, I used Photoshop CS.



Based on the first set of comments, I tweaked the colors from the original card (haven't had a chance to change the text or background designs) so if you want, pick your flavor.



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Like the overall design.....agree with the respondents that it is concise & easy to read. Pretty good.



Like the "radio wave" stuff in the upper left. Keep it. I also think the dark black windows in the Golf are a little distracting.....maybe a shade/or two lighter.



Change the name to "Heath Auto Detailing". You want people to remember your name.................can't find you under "auto detailing" if you start out small.



Ditch the D/A polishing thing too....the others are right, nobody will likely know what it means.



What the other responses infer is: try to relay to the customer the "outcomes" you provide. Swirl removal, polishing, oxidation, etc. are meanigful terms, but to the average user of your services, do they know that they have swirls and need them removed, etc.??.............They know they have dirty cars & cars that aren't so shiny. Think about how to incorporate the "results you provide" in the card. Swirl/oxidation removal, waxing, are the services, but the "means" to the end............just my two cents and thoughts on marketing.



Use the term "interiors". I also like "washing and waxing". Also, how about telling the customer through the correct terms about the better technology you'll be using?



Colors are great for the Eco friendly reference, too. Keep them.



That's my input. Just my opinions.......you did a pretty good job out of the box. Just tweek it and you'll be there. BTW, this is a link to another professional who, in my opinion, had excellent graphical design work done.......just an example for a logo, etc.. www.esotericdetailing.com



See ya :wavey
 
Thanks for the comments Tenor. I don't really know how to incorporate that much into a small simple business card. Hopefully i will be able to explain that to the customer in person or maybe over the phone. Its already pretty cramped as is and I don't think I could explain my process or products. Maybe I'm misunderstanding? I'm going for a simple, concise, professional looking business card to offer to potential customers.
 
No problem...........was a lot of input for a business size card. :) What I was suggesting was just to think about how to make the customer understand the results you were going to provide them & not just the techniques or functions you were going to perform. Like I said, most people won't know what a swirl is or a DA polisher. By using some different terms or words, either in the name of your business or servces you provide, you might convey a slightly different message.



Like I said, I like the color scheme, layout, etc.. You might be able to talk about the processes you use by saying something like this:



HEATH AUTO DETAILING



Like New Lustrous Shines

Complete Exterior & Interior Services

Surface Defect Removal for Best Finishes

Headlight Restorations.....................somebody recommended that



................things to that effect.................



Just suggestions....................hope it turns out the way you like. Maybe too much "good" input!! :idea :)



See ya :wavey





dheath said:
Thanks for the comments Tenor. I don't really know how to incorporate that much into a small simple business card. Hopefully i will be able to explain that to the customer in person or maybe over the phone. Its already pretty cramped as is and I don't think I could explain my process or products. Maybe I'm misunderstanding? I'm going for a simple, concise, professional looking business card to offer to potential customers.
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Ok, I understand a bit better. Thanks Tenor. I'll work on changing the diction.



jdoria said:
Looks good.



Keep the green color and lose all of the text except ECO FRIENDLY and WASH & WAX.
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Thanks, I kind of like the green the best too.





I'm going to add a poll and put the 3 card options on the first page.
 
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